Storyboard - Developments

Having finished our first film draft, we decided to include a few more shots that would enhance our horror film opening, mostly adding close ups to vary the types of shots and also to draw attention to the key of our story line. We firstly would like to include a series of news articles flashing, much like they do in the opening of 'Red Dragon'. This would provide the audience with a back story of the location and why it is a threat to the new owners.

(Red Dragon)

Secondly, we would like to add another close up of the box which would be around shot 9 of our previous story board. 

Thirdly, to make the attic seem more threatening and supernatural we are going to include close ups of dolls that would be filling the space of the attic she is exploring. They would be spliced into the film so that the reveal of the creepy kid is emphasised more as a scary thing.

 Finally, we are going to build on the existing close up of the photos as we felt it was not disturbing enough. We will do this by taking the photos of the girl and gradually making the photos more disarranged e.g. scratching the eyes out of the photos.

First Draft

Review:

At this point I would mark it a level 2 high as it has some strong points such as stable, smooth and controlled camera filming, there are no trembles. The music and dripping sound effect when she is upstairs adds a sinister and creepy affect. The shot with a girl behind lit up by a blue light makes it subtle and spooky. The meaning is fairly clear however the fact that she sees herself in the photos is not this could be adjusted by a close up of the photos and of her eye.

It could be improved through the sounds being merged smoothly so that where it ends and begins is not abrupt. Certain lines are lost such as "Come on Elizabeth, hurry up" is too quiet. The Martha and Chris scene is also not in good light so we will now choose to film it in daylight. There are not enough credits and the fact the title is at the end makes it seem like a trailer. We would adjust the font to what we planned earlier and make it come up during the action. The time where the girl reaches for the light switch there is no sound of the click of the switch therefore we will record the sound effect at a later point.